I love your simile ‘she shivered like it was snowing’. Well done. You worked really well together, using some ideas and characters from our class discussion and then finishing off with your own.
Next steps-> You MUST finish EVERY sentence with a full stop. This will make your writing much easier for your reader to read.
Hi Leo and Brianne,
I love your simile ‘she shivered like it was snowing’. Well done. You worked really well together, using some ideas and characters from our class discussion and then finishing off with your own.
Next steps-> You MUST finish EVERY sentence with a full stop. This will make your writing much easier for your reader to read.
Mrs Hames