Very exciting short story Andro. Good use of adjectives and adverbs. I love your simile. Tip: Don’t forget to use a comma to separate clauses While we were eating, I noticed that we were sweating like onions in a frying pan!
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I really enjoyed this story, use have used the prompt well and used lots of interesting words and a good simile! Well done!
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Very exciting short story Andro. Good use of adjectives and adverbs. I love your simile.
Tip: Don’t forget to use a comma to separate clauses
While we were eating, I noticed that we were sweating like onions in a frying pan!
i will
I really enjoyed this story, use have used the prompt well and used lots of interesting words and a good simile! Well done!