What a relief that your writing has a happy ending Lucille. I was beginning to wonder what would become of you and Isabella!
Your spelling is perfect, well done. You have also used some nice descriptive writing. I especially like your ‘shimmering’ water.
Miss Baker.
This story reminded me of a colleague who was recently rescued in the Atlantic following a small plane crash. I’m glad that, like her, your story has a happy ending. I love your description of the “water shimmering from the bright sun.” I see that you use the word so quite a few times. Try to use some other transition words to keep the readers engrossed in your fantastic story.
What a relief that your writing has a happy ending Lucille. I was beginning to wonder what would become of you and Isabella!
Your spelling is perfect, well done. You have also used some nice descriptive writing. I especially like your ‘shimmering’ water.
Miss Baker.
This story reminded me of a colleague who was recently rescued in the Atlantic following a small plane crash. I’m glad that, like her, your story has a happy ending. I love your description of the “water shimmering from the bright sun.” I see that you use the word so quite a few times. Try to use some other transition words to keep the readers engrossed in your fantastic story.
well thank you Mrs. Vreeland and thank you for your advice i will remember that