Maximillien, this is an interesting combination of ideas from different fairy tales. I liked the way you used the prompt as apart of a simile. I can see you are trying to use compound sentences. Remember to re-read your writing to check for accurate punctuation because it helps your reader to make sense of your writing. I enjoyed reading your response to this week’s 100WC.
This is a great piece of writing and you typed it so quickly and independently. You are our class computer whizz!
I like the way you added extra details to your sentences, like ‘but she was poor’ and ‘a pig house’. They help me to understand and imagine your writing.
Next steps-> Could you use some more ambitious adjectives in your writing next time?
Maximillien, this is an interesting combination of ideas from different fairy tales. I liked the way you used the prompt as apart of a simile. I can see you are trying to use compound sentences. Remember to re-read your writing to check for accurate punctuation because it helps your reader to make sense of your writing. I enjoyed reading your response to this week’s 100WC.
Hi Maximilien,
This is a great piece of writing and you typed it so quickly and independently. You are our class computer whizz!
I like the way you added extra details to your sentences, like ‘but she was poor’ and ‘a pig house’. They help me to understand and imagine your writing.
Next steps-> Could you use some more ambitious adjectives in your writing next time?
this was really COOL!!!! KEEP IT UP AWESOME!!